favors

Today in fiction writing we workshopped one of my stories, whose title I wasn't a fan of so I won't mention it here, and everyone seemed slightly confused but mostly positive on it. I was proud of it but admit it wasn't the best I could do. anyway, everybody gets copies of your story when it is workshopped

and i got everyone's, and they mostly said the same thing, good but vague, etc etc, and then I save one for last whose comments came from this girl i must have mentioned here before, who I'm kind of interested in you could say, and I get to the bottom, and it says "it seemed artificial and contrived",

which I really have to say wasn't what i was looking for, not to say I was thinking she'd dip it in perfume and deliver it to me with her lips, but I expected something a little more enamoring, such as "I see where you're going, but please meet me at make out creek later so we can further discuss this". but, of course, after reading her story, I didn't write 'subtly beautiful and extremely dateable".

On the bright side, I know what she thinks of my writing.